Claire
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Claire
by poledan Sat Jun 06, 2020 12:09 pm
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Re: Claire
by arokh Sat Jun 06, 2020 7:57 pm
to offer some input: i love the descriptions of the outfits and of claire, and i love the sex scene at the end. my only criticism would be that the lead up to the sex + the start of the sex was very rushed, almost nonexistent; it was jarring compared to the great detail everywhere else
fantastic ideas though, and would love to know more about the pictures/outfits that inspired this story. happy to chat over pm or email anytime as well
fantastic ideas though, and would love to know more about the pictures/outfits that inspired this story. happy to chat over pm or email anytime as well
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Re: Claire
by poledan Sun Jun 07, 2020 12:17 pm
I wrote this in about an hour. I like to outline a scenario then get to the point. It's only a short fantasy written by an amateur after all, it's not a novel 
Thanks for the feedback though. I have a second chapter in the making. I'll take more time with it
Thanks for the feedback though. I have a second chapter in the making. I'll take more time with it
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